Hollow walls
Deep down in the water,
So far you can’t see.
Don’t want to come up,
Don’t want to breath.
Looking for the stuff I want,
Looking for the stuff I need,
Looking for this,
Beneath you and me.
You knew I was there when you said hi,
You knew I was there when you said goodbye,
Now its time to say hello,
So don’t say goodbye.
I’m just another lost soil looking inside,
Looking inside those hollow walls,
Take a step inside and watch us fall.
Fall so far you can’t see,
Fall so far you don’t want to breathe.
We finally hit the ground beneath our feet.
We look around at the wonderful scenery,
As if we long for love again.
Wrap my arms around you and love again.
Jesse S.
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11 comments:
dude your poem is intense but you can tell you put alot of felling behind it i really like it grat job
your poem is interesting sounds like you know a lot about poetry
It sounds like you're feeling empty from the pain of someone breaking up with you.
I think you're just throwing a pity party trying to get the girl back. Not very convincing.
Anthony
This is an amazing poem. It seems like you put a lot of thought into this poem and like that you did. I also like this poem because it is a little bit of a challenge to get it.
Nick P (1)
This is so cute.. I love how you mention both people. You and the girl you're falling for. I really like this poem a lot. It's one of the best I've read so far. Great job!
~Rachel~
I can see there is actual meaning. That is why poetry lives for so long. Keep feeling and writing no matter what Tony says.
Nick B.
Oh my gosh that's cute! Is that about someone special...hehe well you're a very good poet Jesse!
-Kesha :)
Wow, you did such a good job on this. You put some thought and feelings into it I can tell.
Kelsee 1st
I like your poem. It is really deep.
I hope you find the one you love.
-shalee l.
Dang thats deep. You did a real good job, keep it up. You are an amazing poet.
i like your poem its really good i can see that you got a lot of feelings inside you i really felt the feelings you had in the poem i loved it nice job
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